SLAM!!!!!!! Goes the basement door as Bailey walks in furiously.
Bailey softly wipes the tears from Lolas's faces after Hearing the unbearable news.
“Aunt Kathy called from the hospital and said the surgeon couldn’t save Mum,” Lola says, gently.
“HOW!!!!! WHY!!!! WHAT???” Morgan replied while tears rolled down her face consistently.
The news was awful and without a doubt heartbreaking, The family spent the rest of the day reminiscing
all the good memories they shared with their Mum, I'm going to miss waking up on Christmas and the look on her
face as well opened up our gifts" says Morgan as she busted out crying.
The next day Morgan wakes up to the sound of glass shattering, thing slamming and Bailey yelling. Morgan sprints
upstairs sees blood oozing from Baileys hands and arms she soon sees a knife laying on the ground surrounded in his
blood, Morgan screams " AHHHH WHAT THE HECK, ARE YOU OKAY?" he rapidly runs out of the house while blood
drips from his clothes and wounds.
face as well opened up our gifts" says Morgan as she busted out crying.
The next day Morgan wakes up to the sound of glass shattering, thing slamming and Bailey yelling. Morgan sprints
upstairs sees blood oozing from Baileys hands and arms she soon sees a knife laying on the ground surrounded in his
blood, Morgan screams " AHHHH WHAT THE HECK, ARE YOU OKAY?" he rapidly runs out of the house while blood
drips from his clothes and wounds.
Solid work, Jaleel!
ReplyDeleteStarting with SLAM is awesome.
"The news was awful and without a doubt heartbreaking" is powerful!
Perhaps you could develop the memories they reminisced? Maybe some examples?
"The next day" can be the start of a new paragraph.
Great work!
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